Ooh. I love the way you're playing with formatting here. Very effective...but almost too much so.
Take out all the formatting and look at the poem again. What do you think of the content without the dressing? While I think that it's still a brilliant poem, I think that you could have done a lot more with this concept.
Kymira12Featured By OwnerSep 14, 2012Hobbyist General Artist
If the </sharp> wasn't there then it'd look great and still make sense. I love how you managed to tell an emotional tale with only six lines and not many people can actually do that and pull it off as well. The flow of your poem was perfect and just flew off the tongue perfectly. I loved it!