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I search for you in every crowd
I long to see your face
Your presence is the cornerstone
That grounds me to this place

You're dancing through my dreams at night
My first thought when I wake
The angel on my shoulder sings
With every step I take

You know my secrets and my fears
You trust me with your own
My world falls in, I run to you
Somehow you feel like home

No safer place than with you near
I miss you when you're gone
So close we do not need to talk
Already know what's wrong
I was waiting for a school bus in the rain when the first two lines came together, and the rest wrote itself. I think it's been waiting a long time for me to just piece it together.

It feels unfinished, though. I'm working on that.

Please do not use without my permission.
Comments are welcome and greatly appreciated. Any feedback is great to hear. What can I do better?
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your rhymes are neat, I like that :clap:
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mitsubishiman Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
I rarely comment on script, but this is scripture....
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violetense Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
What do you mean?
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mitsubishiman Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Scripture, as in biblical prose… a message from the heart...
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violetense Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Gracias. :) That's high praise.
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Ard0R0us Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem conveys a strong sentiment shared by many poets in a powerful way through it's direct simplicity. I like the efficiency -- well done. Also I think your font choice enhances the effect.
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violetense Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Gracias. I like fixed-point fonts because they're easier to play with graphically. :D
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NicolePrince Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012   Writer
I think everyone at one time or another experienced something like this. For me, I married someone like the poem describes. :)
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violetense Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Count yourself lucky. Not many people are so fortunate. :)
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MoonlightWriter13 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student General Artist
I like it. :)
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